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@@ -9,14 +9,15 @@ The [[http://windows7sins.org|Windows 7 Sins]] campaing mentions the
 pressure put by [[Microsoft]] on [[OLPC]] to switch to Windows as one of the
 sins.  Many of my OLPC and [[SugarLabs]] friends were offended by this association
 and pointed out a few factual mistakes.  Contrary to what [[NicholasNegroponte]]
-had announced to the press multiple times, so far only a tiny (unspecified)
+had announced to the press in multiple occasions, so far only a tiny (unspecified)
 fraction of laptops shipped by OLPC were actually preloaded with Windows.
 According to internal OLPC sources, there are no plans for [[Windows7]].
 Moreover, the announced [[XO2]] will be ARM based, which undermines Microsoft's
 ability to run any version of Windows except for the
-[[http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Windows_CE|CE family]] crapware.
+[[http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Windows_CE|CE family]] crapware that was rejected
+even by the mobile market.
 
-The FSF has now corrected the windows7sins web site, but we are left wondering
+The FSF has now corrected the campaign web site, but we are left wondering
 what's actually going on between Microsoft and OLPC; why would Negroponte tell the
 press that OLPC is shipping Windows when in fact it's not and when their roadmap
 would make that highly unlikely?